29 Mar

He did not show it anymore…did not act like it anymore, maybe because he did not feel it anymore, she thought to herself.

The pouring rain was soaking her, freezing her as she knelt on the ground. Tears were falling down her cheeks as she tried to make him come back to her. It was like the  more she pulled him closer, the further her got away

There was an unmistakable feeling of pain in her now shattering heart. With each step he walked away, it felt like a knife was digging deeper in her chest.

The dress she wore to impress him was now completely drenched and covered in mud. A pathetic mockery of its former beauty.

Her mind now wandered off to a period when he cared about how she felt. The days when he could not bare the sight of her tears, when he could not even dream of making her cry.

“i love you so much, you are the best thing that ever happened to me.”, She screamed out at the top of her voice, with everything she was and hoped he would hear and say he felt the same way too. He turned back, a smirk on his gorgeous face. She wished she could read his mind now and know for sure what he was thinking. Was he doing all this just to hurt her, torture her or did he really not care anymore?

Deep down she believed he knew that she meant it. That he was the only man for her, the light at the end of the tunnel. He was the guardian angel she had never had. The friend she could always turn to. But at that moment he felt so far away, a stranger in her life.

Finally after what seemed like forever he uttered something, she swallowed hard and fought back the tears. A lump formed in her throat as she looked at him now through bloodshot eyes.

He then walked away, leaving her cold in the rain with nothing more to hold on to than the last two words he had said. Those words, nothing more than a simple “THANK YOU”.

‘hello, dawn… Are you okay, are you still there?’, the voice at the other side of the line asked.

Dawn was still stuck in her thoughts, the world her brain had created to amplify the torture. Still trying to figure out how he could act so casual about it. She just told him she loved him and all he could manage saying was a ‘thank you’.

She felt pathetic and vulnerable that up to now, she still says it, knowing exactly what his response will be.

‘hello’, he said again, unaware of just what his ‘thank you’ had put her through. The images that had formed in her head. The hurt it brought her.
‘yes am okay, i am still here…i just spaced out there for a second. So whats for the day’, she answered, pretending she was okay with the way their relationship was. They had been through so much Together. She hoped he knew that she was not fine. For how could she be fine, when he could not even say the words. Did not feel the same way. Those three words she longed to hear. The way she felt about him…she knew she could not force him to say them back. Deep down she knew love can not be forced, but even just knowing that, it killed her a little each day.


9 Responses to “DAWN”

  1. shaneadamsjvo March 29, 2012 at 6:36 pm #

    wow this was beautiful all the way through to be honest. To continue my honest i must admit to you as i just had to admit to myself i have no read another writers words in a while that made me question my own writing skills. This was amazing and i think will push me to be even better. Thank you. You have a new fan. I hope you check out some of my work as well


    • A Girl Nicknamed Dee March 29, 2012 at 6:45 pm #

      Thank you very much, that is so nice of you to say that…i am humbled. And i will check out your blog. Thanks again.

  2. jsirrah April 1, 2012 at 1:48 am #

    Awesome flow and intriguing.Well done 🙂

  3. Sui Generis April 2, 2012 at 10:14 am #


    • A Girl Nicknamed Dee April 2, 2012 at 10:55 pm #

      Thank you, sucks loving someone who might not feel the same for you…or atleast doesnt show it much.

  4. Sui Generis April 2, 2012 at 11:17 pm #

    Yeah it does, went through that last year. And I’m on the opposite end this year.

    • A Girl Nicknamed Dee April 2, 2012 at 11:40 pm #

      How did you turn the tables? You have got to teach me sensei lol.

      • Sui Generis April 3, 2012 at 12:13 am #

        Hehehe in time protege.lol.

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